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The Megal
Joined: 16 Apr 2010
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 Posted: Fri Apr 16, 2010 5:26 pm Post subject: Falling Star (looking for criticism) |
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Hello, I'm brand new to these parts and I was wondering if ya guys could give me some gentle criticism. I liked how this piece turned out, when I found the model I knew I had to do something with it. But I feel like it's missing...something. If this where you're creation, what would you change/add? Please and thank you.
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TechnoBach
Joined: 16 Apr 2010
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Location: Ottawa, ON, CANADA
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Hey Megal. I'm new to this too, so maybe someone could critique my critique? 
Anyways, I really like your picture, the falling/glowing effect, but I agree it seems like somethings missing. I was thinking you could make the model be reaching for something? It'd give it more direction. And then maybe a bright star where she's pointing, again for a bit more direction and purpose.
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The Megal
Joined: 16 Apr 2010
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| TechnoBach wrote: | Hey Megal. I'm new to this too, so maybe someone could critique my critique?
Anyways, I really like your picture, the falling/glowing effect, but I agree it seems like somethings missing. I was thinking you could make the model be reaching for something? It'd give it more direction. And then maybe a bright star where she's pointing, again for a bit more direction and purpose. |
Thank you, that's a good idea I shall try it out. I can post it here once I'm done 
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darklite
Joined: 19 Dec 2009
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Location: Oregon, U.S.
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I think it really needs something like more stars in the background not alot, but something to bring out the foreground pic. But mostly, what I see that's distracting is the motion blur filter all around the figure. I agree that a soft glow would help, but to me, the motion should be directly behind the figure, not all around it. Overall, I love it. It's a great idea, and visually very strking.
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icesamurai
Joined: 08 Mar 2010
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I'd put one planet in the background then lower the opacity on the planet as if its far away.
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niftyned
Joined: 07 Mar 2010
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Location: Australia
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The major thing I can see wrong with your peice is the motion blur on the hands and face. The m/blur on the body suggests that the figure is travelling in a downward direction but on the hands and face it is below the figure which suggests that these are moving upward, a bit confusing to the eye. I agree that the b/g needs something subtle added to the big dark space in the lower section. Overall I like the concept but the figure is confused.
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